Logliner
Posted: 2016-03-01T16:07:19+10:00 In:

When a young psychic girl becomes the victim of abuse she must use her ethereal powers to stop the horror and find a path to normality.

When a young psychic girl becomes the victim of abuse she must use her ethereal powers to stop the horror and find a path to normality.
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    1. Mentor

      Hello, logline are about being specific: try to tell exactly what?”stop the horror and find a path to normality” really means… visually. And what kind of psychic, and who abuses her (what kind of abuse).

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    2. Logliner

      Your log-line seems better but instead of using “horror” you can use “abusement”. And you should specify in your script how she got those powers.

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    3. Singularity

      The nature of the initial abuse is important as it is the inciting incident; was she tortured, mutilated, raped? This is the event that motivates her to take action and therefore the more sever the abuse the more powerful her actions.

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    4. Logliner

      I agree, this logline is too vague, but I find the concept interesting and hope you post a revised version.

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