Logliner
Posted: 2017-03-23T09:35:38+10:00 In:

A bad driver tries his best to save his job as an uber driver, finds his next trip with a terrorist who wants to explode a court with a bomb.

A bad driver tries his best to save his job as an uber driver, finds his next trip with a terrorist who wants to explode a court with a bomb.
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    1. Singularity

      While both ideas are good for the script, in the logline your character should have one goal. Since stopping a terrorist attack is more compelling than saving his job I would concentrate on that story line for the sake of the logline and leave the ‘saving his job’ story line for the script itself.

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    2. Singularity

      Agree with Richiev. ?Simplify, focus on the dramatic problem #1 — the urgent need to stop the terrorist attack.

      >>thanks a lot, what about making his ex wife working in the court so he wanted to save her??

      Great for the plot proper. ?It certainly worked in “Die Hard” where the estranged wife works at the company whose employees the terrorists take hostage. ?But I don’t think it’s required for this logline. ?The stakes are implicitly high enough.

      It’s tempting to cram plot details into a logline, but a sign of a good logline is not when there is no more to add, but when there is no more to take out. ?With loglines, less is more.

      The guidelines under “Formula” at the top of web page list mandatory and optional required elements. Cramming in more is not only not necessary, but defeats the purpose of a logline.

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