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rbbarnetPenpusher
Posted: November 28, 20182018-11-28T11:38:37+10:00 2018-11-28T11:38:37+10:00In: Drama

A couple of cynical fixers from different ends of the political spectrum exploit a series of grisly killings that take place during an increasingly bitter election campaign.

A couple of cynical fixers from different ends of the political spectrum exploit a series of grisly killings that take place during an increasingly bitter election campaign.
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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2018-11-28T11:47:58+10:00Added an answer on November 28, 2018 at 11:47 am

      When a mass shooting at a high school occurs during the presidential campaign, a cynical spin doctor battles against her rival to exploit the?horrific event to?hopefully propel?her candidate to the White House.”

      Possible Title: Spin Cycle

      (I changed it a little because I believe you need a specific murder that sets the story in motion, I chose school shooting because it is what’s in the news and people keep exploiting them politically, however, if you prefer the serial killer angle for your story it works as well but it would be better if you described a specific killing not just a series of grisly killings, for instance: “When a serial killer murders beloved kindergarten teacher, a cynical spin doctor battles against her rival to exploit the?horrific event to?hopefully propel?her candidate to the White House.??)

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    2. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2018-11-28T19:25:17+10:00Added an answer on November 28, 2018 at 7:25 pm

      I’d consider making one of the two fixers the protagonist and writing the logline from their perspective (as Richiev has done). This way, there’s a clear protagonist and antagonist which always helps to solidify a story in the reader’s mind. It’s also good to understand which of the two we’re supposed to be rooting for to come out on top.?I’d also consider making one cynical and the other idealistic perhaps? The opposing characteristics can add another layer of conflict. In a bid to make the protagonist more likeable, perhaps don’t have them resorting to despicable methods in order to achieve their goal – however, as long as the protagonist takes a slightly higher road than the antagonist you can get away with a lot!

      What’s the goal here? White House? Just elected official? Give us a tangible goal that we can visual.

      I’d recommend watching Ides of March (2011) and obviously TV shows like The West Wing and House of Cards.

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    3. rbbarnet Penpusher
      2018-11-28T20:44:12+10:00Added an answer on November 28, 2018 at 8:44 pm

      Thanks Mike.? Some good points there but there one thing I am not going to do is lower the cynicism level. Our politics is at a pretty revolting stage and I want to reflect that.

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    4. dpg Singularity
      2018-11-29T03:14:40+10:00Added an answer on November 29, 2018 at 3:14 am

      Truth is stranger than fiction.? And more interesting.? I just don’t see anything in this logline that can top what is currently going on in American politics.? ?(I presume the story in set in the US of A.)

      fwiw

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