A dutiful grandson and his eccentric Greek grandmother begin stealing from the local community in an effort to start their own corrupt chicken farm in their backyard. Things gets a little crazy when people begin to notice their illegal efforts.
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A dutiful grandson and his eccentric Greek grandmother begin stealing from the local community in an effort to start their own corrupt chicken farm in their backyard. Things gets a little crazy when people begin to notice their illegal efforts.
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If you have a lead character who is doing something illegal it usually helps to have a sympathetic?goal.
Possibly a bank threatening to foreclose and they need to raise money fast.
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