Logliner
Posted: 2012-08-20T16:28:21+10:00 In:

A family of losers, while trying to gain foothold in life, are forced into action to save their kidnapped son

A family Action film

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    1. Logliner

      Appreciate your comments guys. Will work on it

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    2. Samurai

      This logline is too vague. As Andrew has said, the protagonist is unclear. It’s certainly an interesting concept – the family of losers – but what are we talking here? Is it like “The Stupids” with Tom Arnold? Are they that bumbling?
      The biggest problem is the “forced into action”. You gotta get specific about that bit, because every single film ever made could be described as one character being forced into action in order to (something). What is the actual catalyst?

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    3. Logliner

      Hi Murugan

      Nice idea. Great i.i (Kidnapped son) but who kidnapped him? Who’s the Antagonist?
      instead of focusing on a group (family) maybe just one character (father, son, sister, Mother etc)
      How would you describe that person, character-wise? Loser, unlucky, lonely, blind? Something that they need to over come before the end of the journey.

      Goal –
      Stakes –
      Inner Conflict –
      Outer Conflict –
      Hook –
      Genre –

      Fill out these elements and the logline becomes more clear. try rearranging or placing new words, more powerful, descriptive words. Shorten the logline to under 30 words, 25 seems to be the best.

      I suggest looking at the “classics” page, here you can see how a logline is written for movies already made.

      “A now broken doctor is sentenced to death for his wifes murder, forced to reassess his morals, he escapes now as the clock ticks he must survive to prove his innocence” – The fugitive

      Best of luck

      Andrew

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