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LeviathanSamurai
Posted: March 22, 20192019-03-22T14:25:24+10:00 2019-03-22T14:25:24+10:00In: Superhero

A former public speaker with super senses and aggression behaviors and a lab scientist must stop a rich influential businessman from destroy the city with a serum provokes violence and aggression.

A former public speaker with super senses and aggression behaviors and a lab scientist must stop a rich influential businessman from destroy the city with a serum provokes violence and aggression.
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    1. variable Uberwriter
      2019-03-22T20:09:21+10:00Added an answer on March 22, 2019 at 8:09 pm

      Why must he?
      Why him?

      (Is it because his awful aggression is taking away from the ‘public speaking’? As a result, his goal should be to restore himself rather than preventing a corrupt magnate from misusing the serum. Since there isn’t any inciting incident, can’t say what his action needs be

      This could set late, and go in any wild direction: “After a corrupt industrialist floods the city with Rage Serum, a berserk public speaker must help its creator in retrieving the-antidote-he-plans-to-sell-for-millions”)

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2019-03-22T16:33:42+10:00Added an answer on March 22, 2019 at 4:33 pm

      I get more of the sense of story from this version of the logline. I also have a better sense of what’s at stake.

      However, I do not quite get why a businessman would want to destroy a city. Businessmen need law and order in order to sell their products or services. A riot or wanton destruction would be the opposite of what a businessman would want.

      Because of this, you may need to add just a little motivation in the logline for the businessman in order to understand why he is going against his nature.
      Perhaps only the businessman has the cure for the serum, so the businessman is going to flood the city with the serum in order to make millions selling the cure.

      Remember, Thanos killed half the population of the galaxy… but he had his reasons.

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