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Jaded70
Posted: January 26, 20132013-01-26T05:40:44+10:00 2013-01-26T05:40:44+10:00In: Public

A lonely, abused housewife falls in love with the female police officer who responds to her desperate domestic 911 call. The wife, ultimately, convinces her female lover to plot to murder the controlling, ego-maniacal husband in order for the ladies to begin a new life together.

Breathless Betrayal

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    1. steveylang Samurai
      2013-02-02T07:17:30+10:00Added an answer on February 2, 2013 at 7:17 am

      I like this. Cameron’s revision is very good. The only thing it loses is a sense of how desperate they are, and how bad the husband is- I think it’s important to keep that. I’m not sure if it’s significant that the wife convinces the officer to kill the husband, or is them pulling it off together. The 2 alternatives do suggest different movies.

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    2. 2013-01-29T00:43:35+10:00Added an answer on January 29, 2013 at 12:43 am

      This plot is a very cool idea, good work.

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    3. Jaded70
      2013-01-27T05:24:43+10:00Added an answer on January 27, 2013 at 5:24 am

      Thanks so much Cameron. You’re the best. Truly appreciate your input. 🙂

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    4. Cameron Pattison
      2013-01-26T07:36:20+10:00Added an answer on January 26, 2013 at 7:36 am

      A clear plot that just needs to be trimmed down:
      “A lonely, abused housewife falls in love with the female police officer who responds to her desperate 911 call. In order to start their new lives together, the women plot to kill the abusive husband.”

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