Samurai
Posted: 2015-09-28T06:11:07+10:00 In: ,

A man awaits the arrival of a violent time-travelling version of himself from 10 years in the future. After he is ‘killed’ by a female undercover cop determined to stop him from breaking bar, he is ‘saved’ by a female bounty hunter who hallucinates slices of the future and is determined to collect the bounty on his badass future self.

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    1. Best Answer
      Samurai

      Also, in the TV series Dr Who and The Hitchhikers Guide, characters have been known to talk to future or past selves via the telephone.

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      Samurai

      Hi priggy,

      In time travel stories it’s not unusual for characters to encounter their future or past selves – in fact it’s a trope. By way of example, consider films such as: 12 Monkeys, Looper, Bill & Ted’s Excellent Adventure, Men in Black 3, X-men: days of future past & Primer.

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      Logliner

      How does a man await the arrival of his time-travelling future self? Surely, the present version doesn’t know when to expect his future-self because the present version doesn’t know anything about the future version.

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    4. Samurai

      Many thanks, Karel. Great comment.

      “Awaiting the arrival of his time-travelling future self, an innocent man is ‘killed’ by a female undercover cop and ‘saved’ by a female bounty hunter who hallucinates slices of the future and must collect the bounty on his badass future self”.

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      Logliner

      I love it!

      Great high concept. But you’ll need to simplify the logline…

      The goal?(or 2nd act action) is wrapped in the final part of the logline: “is determined to collect the bounty on his badass future self”.

      I would give this more prominence, and make it more active “is determined” feels weak. We usually use “must” in a logline, as it is a lot stronger.

      In summary:

      Simplify the setup, and give more prominance to the 2nd act action.

      I hope this helps!

      Cheers,

      Karel

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