The Man Next Door
A mature man who tries to balance working his normal job in the day while working on torturing young woman at night.
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Heya, Could you tell us a little more about what this makes this character interesting? Unique? Special? Maybe even his flaw?
I mean, apart from torturing young women at night, that is 🙂 E.g.
Hannibal Lector – A psychiatrist who is himself insane.
Patrick Bateman- 80s high-flying tycoon who doesn’t like getting his suits dirty.
Charles Manson – A successful former rock star.
Alex Burgess – Teen appreciator of the music of Ludwig Van Beethoven.
I’m sure your character has more to him than being a boring office nerd. Would love to know more.
I agree with Toastman, Have have the idea of what your explaining but you have to put it out there better with a little better detail.
First off, I find your premise very intriguing – a man living the double life of office slave by day and torturer by night.
Secondly, I agree with toastman, I think you should include more information about the main character and the genre. It’s difficult to comprehend whether this will be a drama or a dark comedy.
Keep up the good work!
You have described a situation and it’s an intriguing situation. However this isn’t quite a logline yet.
Story is conflict.
The logline must describe the main conflict. In your logline he goes to work (Everything is fine) he comes home and tortures a woman (Everything is fine) Nothing seems to be standing in his way. There is no conflict.
Is the woman fighting back?
Does he have a nosy neighbor?
Does the woman he’s torturing have a boyfriend who’s snooping around?
I think you have something here but the logline needs some work. Good luck with this.
Thanks you for the feedback I have updated the log line. Hopefully I can gain even more insight from you all.