A millionaire buys a 77-year-old plane. The broken machine will be restored for five years. After that, he and his son fly on historic routes around the world.
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A millionaire buys a 77-year-old plane. The broken machine will be restored for five years. After that, he and his son fly on historic routes around the world.
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In the beginning, I think it’s about a magic plane; then, I think it’s going to be rebuilding the plane (similar to ‘life as a house’); and finally, it just sounds like rich people going on vacation.
Flying to xxxxx in their restored plain a father and son encounter xxxxx which must xxxxx or xxxxxx
This may be how you could set out your logline.
How is this an action film? Where is the action coming from? The impression I get from the logline is that there’ll be a section of the film dedicated to the 5 years where the plane is restored… this isn’t that exciting visually and it’s definitely not what I’d class as action. What happens on these historic flights? As Richiev pointed out, where’s the conflict? Where’s the story?
My best advice is to have a read of other people’s loglines and the corresponding comments and try and get a feel for how the story is shaped by the struggle the protagonist has to go through.
Story is conflict.
The logline, as written has no conflict, thus no story.
Who or what is standing in the way of the lead character achieving his goal?