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Posted: January 27, 20132013-01-27T11:54:55+10:00 2013-01-27T11:54:55+10:00In: Public

A Mossad employed father and his CIA agent son team up to hunt an escaped Nazi.

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    1. 2013-01-30T16:49:37+10:00Added an answer on January 30, 2013 at 4:49 pm

      Firstly, if this story is set in contemporary times then the Nazi must be around 90 years old – hardly a dramatic antagonist! Secondly, if there is meant to be a father-son clash here, then the writer has failed to set up a powerful contrast between the two. A more potent contrast would be, for instance, Mossad father and Greenpeace son.

      The premise of hunting Nazis is almost archaic for the 2010’s era. (I am surprised that the writer did not go on the topical Osama Bin Laden ban wagon.) In any case, this story fundamentally lacks dramatic fire.

      The only way this basic set up might work (I mean, in addition to contrasting the father and son better) would be if the Nazi has been on some experimental serum that has kept him fit, alert, and dangerous in all this time. (In other words, a dark version of Captain America.) In which case the logline should tell us this.

      Steven Fernandez (Judge).

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      2013-02-02T07:07:31+10:00Added an answer on February 2, 2013 at 7:07 am

      I sadly concur with Steven on most points. I really like the idea of having 2 conflicting protagonists (if that indeed was the point) chasing a common enemy, but this is not quite right. I’m not sure about the suggestion of Mossad and Greenpeace? I think you want to take someone from a nation/culture who is in conflict with Israel.

      I largely agree about hunting for Nazi’s. That being said, it depends on the type of movie. If it’s a more deliberate drama rather than action movie, trying to track down a ‘notorious Nazi war criminal’ might be very interesting. But you have to convey that the Nazi is really a bad, bad guy.

      It’s a totally different sort of thing if this is an action movie, when then goes along the path Steven described.

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