The Roadtrip
A playboy Hollywood producer must embark on a roadtrip from Hell with his long lost rebellious son. What will happen when these opposites are forced to attract.
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What is the inner journey going to be?
The outer journey should act as a metaphor for the inner journey of the MC (especially in a road trip movie) as such what is the starting point for the MC? What is the inciting incident? And what is his flaw?
As DPG mentioned the odd couple road trip has been done a story such as this needs a good inner journey to empower the character and increase audience interest. In this instance if you were to describe the inciting incident, character flaw and goal clearly the reader could imagine the charters’s trajectory and understand he will have an arch throughout the story.
Hope this helps.
What is the inner journey going to be?
The outer journey should act as a metaphor for the inner journey of the MC (especially in a road trip movie) as such what is the starting point for the MC? What is the inciting incident? And what is his flaw?
As DPG mentioned the odd couple road trip has been done a story such as this needs a good inner journey to empower the character and increase audience interest. In this instance if you were to describe the inciting incident, character flaw and goal clearly the reader could imagine the charters’s trajectory and understand he will have an arch throughout the story.
Hope this helps.
The only thing I can add is don’t state the question you hope the reader has in their mind. It is heavy hand and makes your writing feel like it has failed to prompt any sort of question.
The only thing I can add is don’t state the question you hope the reader has in their mind. It is heavy hand and makes your writing feel like it has failed to prompt any sort of question.
As the others said.
The Odd Couple Road Trip is a trope as old a “It Happened One Night” (1934) and as recent as “Guilt Trip” (2012). The trick is coming up with a new twist, something that hasn’t already been done.
As the others said.
The Odd Couple Road Trip is a trope as old a “It Happened One Night” (1934) and as recent as “Guilt Trip” (2012). The trick is coming up with a new twist, something that hasn’t already been done.
Why MUST he?
What WILL happen?
Technically, wouldn’t it be a roadtrip TO Hell?
And what exactly can be considered “rebellious” to a “playboy”? Did his son graduate college summa cum laude? Does he hold a steady job at a bank? Does he own a suit?
Far too many unanswered questions here…
Why MUST he?
What WILL happen?
Technically, wouldn’t it be a roadtrip TO Hell?
And what exactly can be considered “rebellious” to a “playboy”? Did his son graduate college summa cum laude? Does he hold a steady job at a bank? Does he own a suit?
Far too many unanswered questions here…
There are a several things that can improve this logline.
First, remove the second line. You shouldn’t have to tell us the two characters are opposites – that should be evident from the words used to describe them.
Second, state your MC’s goal. What is he after? Is he trying to reconnect with his son? Or is he after something else, and are the two of them being thrown together on this road trip because of it?
Third, state the stakes involved. If things don’t go well, what becomes of your MC?
Fourth, describe your two characters in terms that highlight the inherent conflict between them and establish the hook, or irony, in your story. “Playboy” vs “rebellious” doesn’t seem all that dissimilar.
If your MC is a playboy, his son should be the polar opposite.
Your concept is a good one. It reminds me of a logline I ran across in Blake Snyder’s “Save the Cat”:
“A risk-averse teacher plans on marrying his dream girl but must first accompany his overprotective future brother-in-law — a cop — on a ride along from hell!” ~ Ride Along
(This was a 6-7 figure spec sale, btw.)
As Blake noted, the logline states the MC’s goal and makes obvious the comic conflict between the two characters – a classic “fish-out-of-water” tale that thrusts a naive scaredy-cat teacher into the crime-ridden world of his cop brother-in-law.
Good luck – hope this helps
There are a several things that can improve this logline.
First, remove the second line. You shouldn’t have to tell us the two characters are opposites – that should be evident from the words used to describe them.
Second, state your MC’s goal. What is he after? Is he trying to reconnect with his son? Or is he after something else, and are the two of them being thrown together on this road trip because of it?
Third, state the stakes involved. If things don’t go well, what becomes of your MC?
Fourth, describe your two characters in terms that highlight the inherent conflict between them and establish the hook, or irony, in your story. “Playboy” vs “rebellious” doesn’t seem all that dissimilar.
If your MC is a playboy, his son should be the polar opposite.
Your concept is a good one. It reminds me of a logline I ran across in Blake Snyder’s “Save the Cat”:
“A risk-averse teacher plans on marrying his dream girl but must first accompany his overprotective future brother-in-law — a cop — on a ride along from hell!” ~ Ride Along
(This was a 6-7 figure spec sale, btw.)
As Blake noted, the logline states the MC’s goal and makes obvious the comic conflict between the two characters – a classic “fish-out-of-water” tale that thrusts a naive scaredy-cat teacher into the crime-ridden world of his cop brother-in-law.
Good luck – hope this helps