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Posted: April 7, 20232023-04-07T18:26:55+10:00 2023-04-07T18:26:55+10:00In: Thriller

A police officer is forced into a deadly dilemma when an active shooter situation is revealed to be occurring at a nearby high school while a renegade trio of student activists respond by kidnapping and threatening to kill the parents of the shooter in a bid to make him stop his deadly rampage.

I’d be keen to get some feedback on my current dilemma as to whether to tell the story from the perspective of the activist students and reveal that they are in fact only performing the kidnapping in response to the shooter or to tell it from the perspective of the police trying to manage the two scenarios and figure out a way that they can get the best possible outcome for both parties. The former would allow for a single location kidnap safe house (think Reservoir Dogs) and make it easier for me to film it myself but the way in which the police are faced with the dilemma in question might be better served by telling the story from their perspective.

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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2023-04-14T13:50:23+10:00Added an answer on April 14, 2023 at 1:50 pm

      A one-location script would be better.

      As for your logline, it raises a question. If the police officer went to where the active shooter is and shoot them, aren’t both scenarios solved?

      Besides if you have someone actively shooting kids that is where you go. You can send a negotiator to the kidnapping but as an officer, you save the children. It doesn’t really seem like a dilemma as written in the logline.

      However, that does not mean the story isn’t intriguing. It’s just I am not sure why one officer needs to be in two places at once.

      So an interesting idea, but a logline that does raise some questions.

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