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The Doctor
Posted: November 21, 20122012-11-21T13:04:45+10:00 2012-11-21T13:04:45+10:00In: Public

A reclusive writer discovers the murders in her novels are becoming reality before they hit the shelves and must work with a suspicious FBI agent to find the killer and clear her name.

‘Works of Fiction’

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    1. Andrew Bates Logliner
      2012-09-19T15:02:34+10:00Added an answer on September 19, 2012 at 3:02 pm

      Hey Doc
      Try to bring the logline down to 25-27 words. Other than that, Love it, nice work!

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    2. 2012-11-23T17:44:44+10:00Added an answer on November 23, 2012 at 5:44 pm

      The fundamentals here are right. Clear stakes. Flawed protagonist. An interesting supporting character who has good reason to be supsicious of her. An interesting enigma: Copy-cating murders happening before any regular novel reader could know about them.

      The only thing I would suggest is to add to the protagonist’s apparent meekness. Making her elderly or disabled, for example, to enhance the apparent preposterousness of her being the killer herself. (As well as to make it more difficult for her to directly confront and defeat her nemesis.)

      Steven Fernandez (Judge)

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    3. patrockable
      2012-11-29T23:08:51+10:00Added an answer on November 29, 2012 at 11:08 pm

      Stranger than fiction meets murder mystery! I agree with Steven. It’s an intriguing premise with all the right elements, including character flaw, goal and stakes. But how do we keep it under 25 words? Here’s my take:

      When the murders in her novels become a reality, a reclusive writer must prove her innocence by finding the killer.

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    4. patrockable
      2012-11-29T23:09:22+10:00Added an answer on November 29, 2012 at 11:09 pm

      Patrockable (Judge)

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    5. 2012-12-06T15:16:50+10:00Added an answer on December 6, 2012 at 3:16 pm

      Suspicious seems to be the wrong word and its not clear whether he is suspicious of her or if he is the suspicious one.

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