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Posted: August 10, 20162016-08-10T07:31:20+10:00 2016-08-10T07:31:20+10:00In: Horror

A timid young man must protect his friends and himself when the psychopath who killed his father fifteen years ago escapes from an asylum transfer and sets out on a new murdering spree.

A timid young man must protect his friends and himself when the psychopath who killed his father fifteen years ago escapes from an asylum transfer and sets out on a new murdering spree.
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    1. [Deleted User]
      2016-08-10T16:17:25+10:00Added an answer on August 10, 2016 at 4:17 pm

      Halloween? Except killing the dad instead of the sister and you’ve switched to a male protagonist. Try to add some originality, what’s your hook that made you MUST write this down and share it.

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    2. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2016-08-10T14:49:50+10:00Added an answer on August 10, 2016 at 2:49 pm

      Agreed with Richiev, start with the inciting incident then describe the character and goal.

      As it stands the story sounds rather plain. It lacks a hook, or element of interest, that will distinguish it from the many other serial killer movies.

      The character flaw of “?timid?” also sounds rather simple, if not generic, is there anything else you can make him to increase his obstacle?

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    3. Richiev Singularity
      2016-08-10T14:25:49+10:00Added an answer on August 10, 2016 at 2:25 pm

      “When the psychopath who killed his father escapes an asylum…”

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