A vengeful lonely guy consults to his multiple psychopathic personalities, who all either support him, frustrate him or simply do random stuff, while he is deciding whether he should kill his cheating girlfriend or forgive her.
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A vengeful lonely guy consults to his multiple psychopathic personalities, who all either support him, frustrate him or simply do random stuff, while he is deciding whether he should kill his cheating girlfriend or forgive her.
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Is this for a movie short or a full length feature?
What do you conceive as your story hook?
And who, among the diverse personalities within his skull, gets tagged as the protagonist? ?And what does he want? ?What is his overarching objective goal?
The reason I ask is that it seems to me that if you’re intention is to write a feature length film, the ?inciting incident that kicks off the plot would occur earlier than his discovery that his girlfriend is cheating; that is, the discovery of the cheating would trigger the major crisis ?that builds to the climax of the plot. ? And the plot crisis leading to the plot climax is not the same as the dramatic problem and question triggered by the inciting incident.
fwiw
“When he catches the love of his life cheating on him, a recovering psychotic stops taking his meds which triggers an internal war with his multiple personalities, between those who wish to kill her and those who wish to forgive.”