This is an idea that I currently wrote a treatment for but having some doubts about it. I’m basically interested in any thoughts on this concept or if it’s even worth pursuing. It’s going to be a romantic comedy.
A well trained female vampire slaying killing machine must go undercover as a vampire to contaminate a drug that two vampires are developing that will allow vampires to walk during the day time, but when she grows feelings towards one of them, things get complicated.t
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Thanks monimata. I’ve been working on this treatment for a month figuring out the main story beats and finally came up with this. I was almost going to give up on it and maybe work on something else. You basically nail what I’m going for which is good but I want this to be a comedy. I’m trying to figure out how to write the logline to make it a comedy.
Your logline really does help me because it was clunky like you said. The stakes is the human race so I’m glad you got it.
Romcom? I would have never guessed from your logline.Your logline can be streamlined and wordsmithed a bit to avoid the multiple “vampires” and the clunkiness. But I think you have a potentially different take on the vampire trope: Underworld meets Vamps?
Protag – female vampire slayer
Antag – vampire scientists/vampires in general
Goal – prevent that daywalker drug from being developed
Stakes – the human race?
Hook – she falls in love with one of the vampire scientists
My take:
When a beautiful warrior infiltrates a dangerous underworld to prevent the manufacture of the dreaded “daywalker” drug, she unexpectedly falls in love with one of the scientists. Problem is – she’s human and he’s a vampire.