Wedding,Love and Other Drugs
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A woman decides to sabotage her best friend’s wedding when she realizes her former fiance is proposing to her.
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If it is her best friend, wouldn’t she know that she is dating her ex-fiance? ?If this is the fiance quickly deciding to marry the friend instead of the protagonist, I think it needs to be more clear. Funny concept though!
Agreed with most of the above; I understand that the first “her” is the woman and the second “her” is the best friend, but it needs to be made more obvious.
You’ve got everything here it just needs a little tweaking, so i’ll attempt a rewrite with my own spin:
A woman decides to sabotage a wedding when she?receives?two letters in the same day: a divorce notice and an invitation to the wedding of her best friend and?soon to be ex-husband.
I agree with dpg, I don’t understand the relationship between the first half of the logline and the second.
But let’s set that aside for the moment.
In terms of cause and effect your logline is backwards
A: When she realizes her former fiance is proposing to her (Cause)
B: She decides to sabotage her best friends wedding. (Effect)
You have placed the B before the A…
I believe loglines flow better when you put A: Cause before B: effect.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
Please clarify: ?whose “former fiancee”? ? Former fiancee of the protagonist or of her friend?
Either way, I don’t understand why she wants to sabotage her friend’s wedding because of an action of a 3rd party. ? This obviously brings to mind “My Best Friend’s Wedding” in which the protagonist pursues ?the wrong objective goal, but at least ?she has a clearer and credible motivation.