After a vehicle accident cripples his parents but not him, an adoptee must confront what life might be like without both sets of his parents.
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After a vehicle accident cripples his parents but not him, an adoptee must confront what life might be like without both sets of his parents.
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What’s the point in mentioning that he is an adoptee, after his need for parents has been clearly defined. Why would he need to confront life without them when they are still alive? This reads a bit clunky.
After an accident cripples both of his parents, a child must rely on his own self to live.
The plot is unclear from the logline.
What does he do? “…must confront what life might be like…” is too vague a description for a logline – we simply don’t know what the MC’s main action will be.
What is his specific goal? It can’t merely be to survive, the MC needs to set his sights at a definitive end to the story, otherwise, it could go on indefinitely.
What does you lead character do about it. That is what makes a story.
In your story things happen to the lead character, but in a story a lead character is proactive, the lead character does something.
You need to tell us what the lead character does, and that will improve your logline.