This is for a multi-season TV series “Pharoahs”
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After Alexander The Great’s death, one of his generals seizes Egypt, fights to restore it into a mighty empire, and eventually becomes Pharoah, founding a dynasty of kings, queens, and gods.
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Replace founding with reveling or establishing in your logline as its emphasis on the characters bond.
Your logline should look like:
Despite death of Alexander the great, one of his retainer seize to restore Egyptian empire, reveling the dynasty of Gods and Kings
Because this is Historical, it’s okay to use Ptolemy’s name.
What is the main conflict of the story? And who is the face of that conflict?
In other words, you say Ptolemy wants to restore Egypt to its former glory… Who is standing in the way of that goal? Who (Or perhaps what) will the lead have to overcome so we the reader know what success looks like?
Thanks for your perspectives. I’m not convinced enough people know who Ptolemy was and even if they’ve heard of the name they may think we was an astronomer! I agree with your other comments – need to find a way of saying something about wresting Egypt from the hands of his contemporaries as the western world descends into chaos. (This has resonances with the breakup of the USSR!)
Good luck with this. Never thought about the historical similarities in that manner, definitely a unique take.