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Who are his people, Elves? (I only say that because your lead character seems to have lived hundreds of years like the elves of legend)
Or are his people gypsies?
Or are his people aliens?
Since I don’t know who his people are I will have to take a wild stab at it:
“After meeting a girl who he believes is a long lost descendant of his people, an elf who can magically spread joy to others, desperately searches for his kin, lost ages ago.”
Interesting. What were your influences for this, Kendra?
A mysterious traveller who magically spreads joy to others searches for the family he thought lost centuries ago.
– I kind of feel like that’s all you need. You’ve got a unique character. Plenty empathy with the family stuff. Just needs some stakes.
After meeting a girl who resembles his people, a mysterious traveller who magically spreads joy to others searches for the family he thought lost centuries ago.
– Including the inciting incident in this one.
Don’t worry about being wrong. Experiment. (It will keep you creative.)
Keep carving it down to its essence.
What do you want to see?
I think this is heading in the right direction.
Does the protagonist believe that he is the last of his kind? If so, I think that’s important.
As Richiev highlighted, I think it might be good to specify who or what this protagonist is.
I’d consider adding another factor – this girl is lost and she’s trying to find her way home too. If this girl appears in the first act of the film and is a big enough character to effectively provide the story for everything else that happens, then she’s going to be there for the duration so I think she needs to have a goal too. It’s a Buddy Love story.
Maybe (and I kinda like this idea) she spreads fear and he spreads joy. She displays the same characteristics as him but is actually a different species and this could say something about the world we live in today. This could be a nice midpoint or Act II climax reveal.
When he finds a lost girl who seems to be one of his species, a lonely elf who believed he was the last of his kind must find a way to get her home in the hope it will lead him to a family he lost centuries ago.?
They’re both looking for family and he has his own selfish motive intertwined with an altruistic one. I think the bit about him “spreading joy to others” is possibly unnecessary… it tells me a little about his character but I’m not sure it does anything to the plot.
What’s the ending? What’s the message?
Excited to see where this goes next.