After an inexplicable resurrection following her ?end-of-life? party, a terminally ill matriarch returns to her grieving family with a primal hunger ? and begs them to kill her before the murderous urge takes control.
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After an inexplicable resurrection following her ?end-of-life? party, a terminally ill matriarch returns to her grieving family with a primal hunger ? and begs them to kill her before the murderous urge takes control.
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I find it odd that the murderous grandma is the lead character. You would think the lead character would be one of the family members who must stop her.
As for the story, I think this is an interesting set-up. I could see this as a single location story. Where the family members are called to a mysterious mansion out in the middle of nowhere. They think their grandma is going to die but she turns into a werewolf or some other creature and kills them one by one until the lead character finally stops her.
However as dpg pointed out, there does seem to be some logic flaws to the premise. But if the story is good some of those logic flaws can be explained away or forgiven.
But the logline does need some work.
Possible title: To Grandma’s House We Go
>>a primal hunger
For what?? Cannibalism?? If so, say so.? If not clarify.
>>begs them to kill her
If she realizes she’s that dangerous to others, why doesn’t she just kill herself?
The logline frames a narrative only in relation to the dramatic? problem and the problem character, the matriarch. There is no designated solution character, no protagonist who must take the lead in solving the dramatic problem.? Check out “Our Formula” for guidelines on writing an industry acceptable guideline.
And the proper genre for this seems to be horror, not drama.