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Forrest Rawls
Posted: March 20, 20132013-03-20T09:31:47+10:00 2013-03-20T09:31:47+10:00In: Public

After deciding to take his dog for a walk in the forest, he finds himself with a wooden box that possesses a powerful ring, but there is someone else, who wants the power.

Ring of Wishes

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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2013-03-20T10:14:48+10:00Added an answer on March 20, 2013 at 10:14 am

      Since so much needs to be said in a logline, it’s important to know what to cut and what to keep.

      Fore-instance, I would cut “After deciding to take his dog for a walk in the forest,” Since going on a walk doesn’t sound important to the story.

      I would also cut “he finds himself with a wooden box,” because the ring’s important, not what material the box is made of.

      -After finding a powerful ring-

      Next you should give us a glimpse of the main character, You simply refer to him as “He”

      How about, -A gruff woodsman-

      Next you should do the same for the Antagonist. You simply refer to him as “Someone Else”

      How about, -A greedy Wizard-

      Now you should tell us what the hero needs to “Do”

      -He must protect the ring in order to save the world-

      Now let’s try to put this together, maybe make a few small changes and see what comes up.
      ——
      “After finding a powerful ring, a gruff woodsman must keep the magical relic from a greedy wizard in order to save the world.”
      ——
      Your logline can be different of course, it might not be a ‘Gruff Woodsman’ but a ‘Lonely Baker’ but hopefully you see how I put this together.

      I have, good guy, his goal or what he needs to do, who or what is standing in his way and what the stakes are.

      Hope this helped. Good luck with this!

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    2. Forrest Rawls
      2013-03-21T07:51:05+10:00Added an answer on March 21, 2013 at 7:51 am

      Thank you for you kind words. I have updated it to “After finding a powerful ring, a white-collar man must keep the magical relic from a greedy other dimensional man in order to save the world.”

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    3. Richiev Singularity
      2013-03-21T08:59:22+10:00Added an answer on March 21, 2013 at 8:59 am

      That is definitely better Forrest. You could even get more specific if you wanted. Instead of White-collar man you could say Banker or Stockbroker in order to give more description to the reader.

      Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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