Posted: 2013-10-02T06:26:49+10:00 In:

After having searched around the world for the perfect girl, a young man finds just what he?s been looking for in his own small town where a high school friend has always been waiting for him.

Why Not Me

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    4 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      You usually give us pretty solid loglines, I am not quite sold on this one.

      In loglines I don’t believe you should give away the end of the story and that’s what it feels like in this logline, (Your character meets the woman of his dreams and lives happily ever after)

      I would try adding conflict to this logline. Maybe give the girl a reason not to like him or a situation why they can’t be together. Something he must overcome.

      Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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    2. Singularity

      Reminds me of:

      “And the end of all our journeying.
      Will be to arrive where we started.
      And know the place for the first time.”
      — T.S. Eliot

      Anyway, has potential. But what objective goal and dramatic need sent him on a worldwide quest? Why was he blind to what was in his own small town?

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    3. Good comments. Food for thought to develop this into a stronger concept.

      This was envisioned as a character piece. His conflict is internal believing that happiness is out there somewhere when in fact in can sometimes be right in front of you. The conflict throughout the film is that even though he returns home, he still thinks “it” is out there and he just needs to find it. He is blind to what is right in front of him.

      Thanks for the notes. Love the T.S. Eliot quote!

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    4. It seems so generic. Give me a specific attribute or two for the protagonist (particularly if they hint at weaknesses), and I suspect the rest will fall into place.

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