After his feminist wife comes in possession of a gun that belongs to the mafia , a timid man has to stop and fight the mafia that they are now running from, and save his failing marriage in the process.
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After his feminist wife comes in possession of a gun that belongs to the mafia , a timid man has to stop and fight the mafia that they are now running from, and save his failing marriage in the process.
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Why doesn’t he find the weapon?
“After his feminist wife comes in possession of a gun that belongs to the mafia , a timid man has to stop and fight the mafia that they are now running from, and save his failing marriage in the process.”
Why would the mafia particularly care that she has a gun? The inciting incident should be described as her killing someone in the mafia or stealing something of importance, which explains why they come after her.
Why does it matter that she’s a feminist?
You describe two goals in the logline, to stop the mafia and save his marriage. Pick only one for the logline and describe it.
Maybe describe a more specific goal. What exactly must he do in order to stop the mafia? Just killing some of their men probably won’t do it.
The inciting incident is them witnessing a mafia murder. Why is her wanting to go to the police a problem for the husband? This is the best thing they can do, unless, of course, he is a member of a rival mafia.