Logliner
Posted: 2017-12-29T23:14:49+10:00 In:

After instructing his viewers to boycott a product a bombastic news anchor is held hostage by a fired employee who is determined to make him pay with his life.

After instructing his viewers to boycott a product a bombastic news anchor is held hostage by a fired employee who is determined to make him pay with his life.
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    1. Uberwriter

      If he is “determined to make him pay with his life”
      and has already “held hostage”
      what’s stopping him from killing our protagonist?

      If he is a sadist too, than that must be mentioned in the logline or the plot stops there..

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    2. Singularity

      The plot line seems similar to “Money Monster” (2016).

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    3. Uberwriter

      This example would read better if you rewrite it focusing on what the victim/protagonist needs to overcome and a little bit more of what he needs to do for it. A ticking time bomb would help too.

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    4. Singularity

      The first half of the logline is not needed. You should drop the first part then add what Foxtrot suggested.
      —–
      “Held hostage by a disgruntled ex-employee who’s lost his insurance, a bombastic conservative news anchor is given 12 hours to convince the American people free healthcare is a right or be shot live,?on the air.”
      —–

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    5. Singularity

      Agreed with Foxtrot25 and Richiev.

      You can start the logline with him being taken hostage but you need to describe what he must do to resolve the situation. I would add that you could give him an unusual ability that he could use to free himself. What if he is an ex-cop, a veteran, or former MMA fighter? Anything really as long as it gives him a skill he can use.

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