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After looking in a bewitched mirror, a schizofrenic superhero suffering from anterograde amnesia must defeat her super vilan alterego in ten nightmares in order to not wake up as evil reincarnated.

After looking in a bewitched mirror, a schizofrenic superhero suffering from anterograde amnesia must defeat her super vilan alterego in ten nightmares in order to not wake up as evil reincarnated.
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    3 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      You may have thrown just a few too many elements into your cocktail.

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    2. Singularity

      This is confusing.

      The MC is a schizophrenic, a superhero, and an anterograde amnesiac (had to look that one up just to understand what it means) – which one is the MC’s defining characteristic?

      On top of the MC’s description being convoluted, the fantasy/supernatural genre lacks specificity – it involves superheroes, magic, and demonic elements.

      I suggest you pick the one most appropriate description for the MC, and narrow down the genre to the most relevant such as; angels and demons (Constantine), magic (Harry Potter) or plain old (fill-the-gap) super-hero guff.

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    3. Uberwriter

      Rutger,

      Wouldn’t you want to build up your hero within a normal world first before you throw all these mental obstacles for him/her to conquer first?

      The good side is that you have established a worthwhile goal already. Just nothing specific about the hero.

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