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LeviathanSamurai
Posted: November 14, 20182018-11-14T02:18:49+10:00 2018-11-14T02:18:49+10:00In: Action

After losing a competition and her partner, the competitive girl finds a new partner with skills in martial arts, which brings her dance skills to a new level and allows her to open up to a new possibility, unaware of the dangerous people looking for him.

After losing a competition and her partner, the competitive girl finds a new partner with skills in martial arts, which brings her dance skills to a new level and allows her to open up to a new possibility, unaware of the dangerous people looking for him.
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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2018-11-14T06:48:40+10:00Added an answer on November 14, 2018 at 6:48 am

      Usually, the ‘fish out of water’ story is told from the point of view of the fish.

      (That being said, the overall concept is solid and sell-able)

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2018-11-14T06:50:10+10:00Added an answer on November 14, 2018 at 6:50 am

      My impression is that the? martial arts fighter would be a more interesting, and hence, a better candidate to be the protagonist than? the dancer.? And so a better character around whom to frame the plot (and logline).

      For one? thing, the fighter is a “fish out of water” character,? the one who has to adapt to a radically new role, a totally new situation, learn whole new moves.? The fighter has to learn to work with instead of fight against.?

      Further, he is the character who has to take the greater risks, faces the greater jeopardy because of the enemies he’s made.? He has more at risk, more to lose than the dancer does,? like his life.? What does the dancer have to lose other than her pride and the respect of her peers?? She already lost those in the setup.

      However,? I like that you want to cast a woman in the protagonist role.? So why not switch their roles?? He’s the dancer; she’s the fighter?

      fwiw

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