Genre: Psychological Thriller
Paul ClarkeSamurai
After saving a victim at the hands of a notorious torturer, a ferociously driven young female FBI agent must help him find his identity in order to catch an infamous Crime Lord and silence her critics once and for all.
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“Ferociously driven” doesn’t sound right to me; I’d use “profusely driven”, or “abundantly driven”…if you’re going to mention the “critics” in the logline, best you give us an idea WHY she is critcized so much. My guess is that it is because she is so driven, but if not, I wouldn’t even include it.
“A profusely-driven FBI agent must help an amnesia victim recover his memory so he can help her catch a heinous crime boos, while also repairing her damaged reputation.”
Hope some of these ideas were of some help. Good luck, as it sounds like a great concept!
I think it’s a good logline in that it gives me a pretty good idea of what to expect – and I’d really like to see it.
The “and silence her critics” is intriguing and perhaps not clear enough. Is it because of her methods? Is she some sort of female Dirty Harry? (I think of him because I just happen to be re-watching the DH movies…)
Why does the FBI agent have critics..? Is she a bad agent..?
A dedicated FBI agent saves and helps a victim to track down a ruthless crime boss
“After saving a victim at the hands of a notorious torturer, a ferociously driven young female FBI agent must help him find his identity in order to catch an infamous Crime Lord and silence her critics once and for all.”
Way too many adjectives.
“To prove herself, a young female FBI agent aids a torture victim to catch an infamous Crime Lord.”
Better, but still don’t like it. Let me think on it some.
What’s driving her?