or Logline #2:
After the death of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his drug addiction and leaves his old life for a long-forgotten passion: dancing.
Can you imagine/picture it? Does it make sense to YOU?
Or does it (drug addiction, dancing) need to be explained further/differently?
And which one do you like better?
Thanks xx
What is standing in the lead character’s way?
His addiction problem. I worked out a slighty different logline.
What do you think about: “After the murder of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his addiction problem and leaves his old life to seek revenge.”
…is it clearer know?
“After the murder of his secret lover, a drug-addicted lawyer seeks revenge on those who killed the man he loved.”
“After the murder of his secret lover, a drug-addicted lawyer seeks solace in ballroom dancing, but must overcome his addictions if he’s to truly be free.”
I vote for More Cowbell aka Richiev ballroom dancing version.
He’s got the addict fever… and the cure… is more dancing 😉
I like it! It makes sense to me and I picture it being a drama, maybe with some comedy. I would specify the drug(s) he’s addicted to and what form of dancing your MC does. I prefer Logline #2 because “leaves his old life” paints a clearer picture than saying: “until he finds fulfillment”. I would add what the main obstacle is for your MC, what has the potential to negatively affect his life? Is your MC still an addict after finding his true calling?