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dutchlegend1486
Posted: September 30, 20142014-09-30T21:27:34+10:00 2014-09-30T21:27:34+10:00In: Public

After the death of his wife, An expert salesman is sent to prison and his children put in to care. Upon his release, He and his confident lawyer brother will take on the courts for custody however will his disabled daughter and young son have adapted to their surroundings and be too little too late.

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    1. dpg Singularity
      2014-10-02T03:07:56+10:00Added an answer on October 2, 2014 at 3:07 am

      It’s infinitely harder to win back the lost love and trust of one’s children than it is to win back legal custody.

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2014-10-02T03:07:56+10:00Added an answer on October 2, 2014 at 3:07 am

      It’s infinitely harder to win back the lost love and trust of one’s children than it is to win back legal custody.

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    3. Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai
      2014-10-01T16:54:05+10:00Added an answer on October 1, 2014 at 4:54 pm

      ^ Agree pretty much with dpg’s iteration of the logline and his suggestion … but I’d say that “struggle to reconcile” doesn’t feel particularly compelling to me. I like the concept of fighting for custody of them … simply because I can visualise how that ends, for good or bad. I find it really hard to envision “reconciliation” as a cinematic goal … unless he’s physically a long way from them and the story is his journey to find them.

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    4. Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai
      2014-10-01T16:54:05+10:00Added an answer on October 1, 2014 at 4:54 pm

      ^ Agree pretty much with dpg’s iteration of the logline and his suggestion … but I’d say that “struggle to reconcile” doesn’t feel particularly compelling to me. I like the concept of fighting for custody of them … simply because I can visualise how that ends, for good or bad. I find it really hard to envision “reconciliation” as a cinematic goal … unless he’s physically a long way from them and the story is his journey to find them.

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    5. dpg Singularity
      2014-10-01T04:30:21+10:00Added an answer on October 1, 2014 at 4:30 am

      When a man is exonerated from his wife’s murder and released from prison, he must struggle to reconcile with his children who have bonded with their foster parents.

      (In the logline, there needs to be a causal relationship between the wife’s death and the man’s incarceration. If there is no such relationship then her death is merely backstory in the plot and extraneous to the logline.)

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    6. dpg Singularity
      2014-10-01T04:30:21+10:00Added an answer on October 1, 2014 at 4:30 am

      When a man is exonerated from his wife’s murder and released from prison, he must struggle to reconcile with his children who have bonded with their foster parents.

      (In the logline, there needs to be a causal relationship between the wife’s death and the man’s incarceration. If there is no such relationship then her death is merely backstory in the plot and extraneous to the logline.)

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