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Posted: 2016-03-20T05:30:52+10:00 In:

An abused-at-home teenager finds himself in a school for special people where a wicked over-authoritative nurse suppresses rebellion by slowly turning all teenagers into vegetables.

An abused-at-home teenager finds himself in a school for special people where a wicked over-authoritative nurse suppresses rebellion by slowly turning all teenagers into vegetables.
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    3 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      Vegetables??

      Literally or figuratively?

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    2. Logliner

      This sounds like a horror or even a horror/comedy more than a Thriller. The supernatural can sometimes be apart of Thriller, but not to the extent of humans turning into vegetables.
      Also, “finds himself” isn’t a good choice of words for the inciting incident. You need to make it very clear that going to the school was not his choice, it was an event that happened TO HIM, not one from his own actions.
      When a teenager with an abusive past is sent to [specific school] with a killer headmaster, he must [do the action] to stay alive/save himself/save others etc.

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    3. Mentor

      As far as I’m concerned, I think vegetables means apathetic, ?but it would be so much better if there would be a supernatural flavour. I d like the idea of kids turning into vegetables. Anyway, there must be some kind of goal for the main character.

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