"An entitled man-child has one night to pay back a criminal debt, so he robs his own family?s restaurant."

I agree with Richiev — there is no reason to sympathize with the lead. I think changing the descriptor “Entitled Man-Child” might be a way of making him sound more ‘likable’/ empathetic… and/ or, you could be more specific in how he actually finds himself in his predicament. At the moment, he comes across as selfish, immature, and his debt was incurred in an amoral way (what I get from ‘criminal debt’) — I’d want to see this guy fail (that could very well be your intention — I don’t know…)

Also — he comes up against no opposition in his quest to rob from his own family? With 10 or so words up your sleeve you have some room to present an antagonist, as well as present the plight of your lead in a better light by being more specific about his predicament.

Below is just an example — not supposed to be entirely reflective of your plot… obviously…

“A lazy door to door salesman attempts to hold up his Father?s restaurant to repay the debt he incurred to a vicious loan shark that paid for his father?s restaurant?s renovations.”