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An ex-convict trying to get his life right finds himself framed in a huge corporate scam, he must utilize his street skills to prove his innocence

An ex-convict trying to get his life right finds himself framed in a huge corporate scam, he must utilize his street skills to prove his innocence
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    1. Singularity

      Agreed with the above also be specific what specifically must he do to achieve what specific goal?

      Without these details the plot sppears generic in nature and not interesting as a result.

      Hope this helps.

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    2. Singularity

      When an ex-convict trying to go straight is framed in a? corporate scam, he must revert to his former criminal life in order to expose the true culprits.?? (28 words)

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    3. Mentor

      Hello,
      I agree with the previous comment,

      the interest of the movie is in what happens- what kind of corporate scam? Why/how is he framed in the scam?

      “An ex-convict trying to get his life right “, this is a classic setting and it works fine but then I feel like I need something really ‘crazy’.

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    4. Singularity

      When an ex-convict trying to go straight is framed in a huge corporate scam, he must… he must… he must…

      The logline sets up a situation and an inciting incident and the stakes are clear and high enough:? he’s in jeopardy of going back to jail for life.? Of course, he must prove his innocence, expose the real culprits.? That’s a no-brainer.?? So ?it doesn’t really qualify as a story hook.

      The story hook would be in? what?becomes his game plan.? What unique and interesting action — the core of the plot — does he undertake?

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