An ex footballer embroiled in a scandal returns home to clear his name and reignite an old flame, but revelations regarding the shameful aftermath of his team's grand final once again threaten to turn his life upside down

Verbose and inefficiently expressed. Also, why wouldn’t this footballer run off into exile if he has been so publically shamed and scandalised? What possible ‘escape’ would his home provide that, say, a far off country town could not? Thirdly, what kind of vacc-head is he to think that he would have a chance with his “old flame” in the aftermath of his shame? Sure he is only a footballer, but to be worthwhile protagonist he must at least demonstrate an IQ above 30. Badly worded and too many story holes. No stars.

Steven Fernandez (Judge)