An overconfident successful engineer creates a machine to venture inside a dying notorious murderer?s brain and walk in it like virtual reality, only to find himself lost in the man?s enigmatic mind, while he must escape before the man takes over his mind and body
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An overconfident successful engineer creates a machine to venture inside a dying notorious murderer?s brain and walk in it like virtual reality, only to find himself lost in the man?s enigmatic mind, while he must escape before the man takes over his mind and body
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Of all the minds that the engineer could choose to explore with his techno-toy, why does he choose to explore the mind of a murderer? ?What’s ?the psychological hook that motivates his choice? (The latent character flaw as opposed to the manifest one, “overconfidence”?)
The plot is unclear, what does the engineer have to achieve? What is his goal? What motivated him? to achieve it? What’s the inciting incident?
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