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At a diversity leadership convention, a straight male accidentally walks into the women?s restroom..

At a diversity leadership convention, a straight male accidentally walks into the women?s restroom..
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    3 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      This is a situation not a story.
      In a story you have an event, such as you have described, this leads to your character having a goal and something standing in the way of the goal.

      What is your lead characters goal?
      What is standing in the lead characters way?

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    2. Uberwriter

      Agreed with Richiev. Also,
      An Inciting incident MUST IMPLY CONFLICT
      Which drives the protagonist towards an objective Goal
      A simple edit for the event could be —
      “When a straight male accidentally GETS LOCKED into the women?s restroom……..”

      It lacks the “high stakes” to sustain a feature length film. Good Luck socs_123!!

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    3. Samurai

      Is this a 30-second short?

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