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thedarkhorseSamurai
Chained together by backwoods cannibals, a bank robber and his hostage escape and must survive in unknown terrain – while the hostage is desperate to save her daughter, who they left with their captors.
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I think this logline would work better if it was presented from the point of view of the hostage. Her daughter is in the hands of backwoods cannibals, and she is chained to a bank robber who wants to escape, and she must find a way to save her daughter.
So I think the story concept is solid, but the most intriguing part is the plight of the mother/hostage and the logline would be more compelling if told from her point of view.
Cool – as long as the concept is solid.
(This is more a logline for me and the first draft as opposed to the marketing logline which will probably look different and hopefully leaner.)
Without giving anything away – that’s basically what happens MP. (Think what happens in “Psycho”.)
I agree with Richiev – I think you need to choose a protagonist for us to follow – and the hostage seems like the likely choice. He/she then has has to escape the cannibals to rescue his/her daughter.