Challenged by a misunderstood gang member who has become a bad influence at their school, a high school freshman pastor strives to remind him the importance of giving the lord a chance.

This logline is much better than the first attempt and I think it’s a great idea for a movie.

I’m worried your logline still doesn’t have an “or else”

The lead must do this ‘or else’ this bad thing will happen.

But your logline does have, the lead, his goal and an Idea of what the conflict will be.