“Claudia V?zquez is the most prestigious and reputed parapsychologist in Spain today, who from her early years until her maturity will not stop from facing the paranormal, until having a surprising and disconcerting final confrontation.”
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“Claudia V?zquez is the most prestigious and reputed parapsychologist in Spain today, who from her early years until her maturity will not stop from facing the paranormal, until having a surprising and disconcerting final confrontation.”
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As DPG wrote, you’re missing the key ingredients of a plot in the logline.
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At the others have said.
Unfortunately, the logline buries and obfuscates the lead, the inciting incident. “Until having a surprising and disconcerting final confrontation? belongs at the beginning, not the end.? And the “confronation” needs to be specifically defined.? And then how she must respond to it; IOW: what becomes her objective goal as a result.
You spend too much time on the setup and not enough time on the story.
What is the story actually about?
Yes it's correct. Okey thank you very much. I'll keep it in mind. A greeting.A reputed psychologist becomes relentless in her pursuit of the paranormal resulting in a final confrontation with the powers of the unknown.
I’m sure everyone here will agree that you should not mention the character’s name unless she is a previously known figure or a real-life person.