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(Comedy) What if an old woman found a spaceship in her backyard and the government wants it, but she wants to keep it to help her alien friend!
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Thinking to E.T. and 1941, I’m sure that’s an idea Steven Spielberg would love!
Hi Helise,
I think you have a good logline, a nice pitch, and matter to make a great funny story :
A single-handely mischievous and bright grandma can defeat an entire foolish administration without any problem!
Hi dpg,
Nice pitch!
E.T. meets Grumpy Old Woman
And with the Backyard:
When the government rummages her backyard to get the spaceship of a nice alien, it should beware of the grandmother who adopted the latter?
What about this?
“When the government wants to get the spaceship of a nice alien, it should beware of the grandmother who adopted him”
Thank you for your help!
This sounds like a solid story: you’ve already answered the who (old woman), what if they fail (government takes ship – but why is this bad, greed on her part, stinginess, a lovable alien – why does she want the ship?), and the why now (the ship crashed now). So you’ve got all that, just need to cut down the sentence.
Maybe: “When a spaceship crashes in an old woman’s backyard, she must battle the government to keep it.” Still long sorry. Mainly I think I just want to know WHY she wants to keep it – can take it from there.