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Posted: 2018-02-23T08:03:42+10:00 In:

Devastated by the murder of his famous screenwriters murder, only brother seeks justice as police and FBI aren’t making enough progress, and pursues bipolar suspect, hindered at every turn by influential family.

Devastated by the murder of his famous screenwriters murder, only brother seeks justice as police and FBI aren’t making enough progress, and pursues bipolar suspect, hindered at every turn by influential family.
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    1. Uberwriter

      Frustrated by police inaction, a man starts investigating his brother?s murder. He is now a target, discovering the suspect is part of a influential family hindering the investigation at all levels.

      This is a bit wordy and needs polishing. But it is story not set up. Tell us about the events not what gets us there.

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    2. Singularity

      One of the problems with this logline is we know more about the victim than the lead character,
      The victim is a famous screenwriter, the lead character is a brother.
      I would switch that around…
      drop the details about the brother in the logline and add details about the lead character so we get an idea of who we are following.

      “When his famous brother is ritually murdered, a struggling writer delves into the shadowy world of the occult to discover the killer”

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