THE KILLING SPREE
Heartbroken after being dumped by his longtime girlfriend, a guy?s best friends devise the perfect plan for his recovery and teach him how to sleep with as many women as humanly possible.
Share
Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
Hi Cameron… Think you have covered all the bases and your logline is pretty good. My only feedback is that although the title is catchy, it is alluding that your script is a horror film and this may turn away potential rom-com/comedy producers. I really like the concept and am sure it would be really popular with the young-mid male market. Lucky for you as this is the biggest market that everyone wants to attract. All the best, Bec
The last element described heree (ie the plan to sleep with heaps of women) brings down the whole story to the lowest of the low level. While there is always a market for broad comedy, it is a shame that this story had to include the low element. For, without it, the story could really work and engage a far bigger audience.
Wanting to ‘get back’ at the girlfriend is great. Ruining her reputation would be even better. Doing either with the help of friends is perfectly workable. But why did the recovery or revenge plan have to be so crass? Why could not the plan, instead, be exposing some embarrassing secret about the girlfriend and/or toppling her from some high social pedestal? The crass element is this concept’s greatest flaw. It is a giant let down.
Secondly, there’s no clear antagonist here. (Problem!) If the girl is particularly smart, or has a powerful father, that would be enough to enable the reader to see that the buddies are in far a tough time. But nothing is stated in the logline to suggest much opposition to the plan. (Significant flaw #2.)
Steven Fernandez (Judge)
As a woman, I would not see that movie with that title. Why is it called “The Killing Spree”? Does he kill the women after so they don’t talk? Why not take the road that millions of other men do, and just not call the next day?
As bec mentioned, it might be popular with a young-mid male market, but they’d have to wait for it to get out of theaters as this would be a guaranteed “R”.
Personally I think you could open it up to a broader range by changing the title. Have him learn from his friends how to pick up girls, he can figure out his way to the bedroom from there.