Logliner
Posted: 2017-02-21T10:24:58+10:00 In:

In 1980s California, a streetwise stoner braves the hidden world of the suburban mafia as he searches for the truth about his biological father.

In 1980s California, a streetwise stoner braves the hidden world of the suburban mafia as he searches for the truth about his biological father.
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    1. I’ve left a response on your newest revision of this.

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    2. Singularity

      I am unclear as to what you mean by the “Suburban Mafia”

      is it the real mafia who happen to dwell in Suburbia?
      or is it like the ‘gay mafia’ a term you are using to describe overly zealous housewives?

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    3. Samurai

      A ?streetwise stoner poisoned by a rare species of frog must fight the suburban mafia of 1980’s?Los Angeles?to?ascertain the antidote from his mother?and confront his biological father about the bizarre supernatural?circumstances?of their?estrangement

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    4. Singularity

      This logline lacks some plot critical information, bellow are a few questions I suggest you try and answer in the next draft:

      Why now? What’s the inciting incident that forces him to find the truth?

      What is this truth that he is searching for??What is it the stoner doesn’t know?? The father’s identity? Where he is?

      Why does he NEED to find out the truth about his father? What are the stakes?

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