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Posted: February 27, 20182018-02-27T02:46:57+10:00 2018-02-27T02:46:57+10:00In: Comedy

In order to open a fingerprint secure safe and steal money for his chemotherapy, a shy delivery boy who can not see a blood has to cut and steal five thumbs from five different mafia bosses in one night.

In order to open a fingerprint secure safe and steal money for his chemotherapy, a shy delivery boy who can not see a blood has to cut and steal five thumbs from five different mafia bosses in one night.
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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2018-02-27T09:14:58+10:00Added an answer on February 27, 2018 at 9:14 am

      Chump Change

      In the course of his deliveries, the lead character discovers two big pharma execs have just petitioned Congress to get exclusive rights to the medicine his daughter needs to stay alive, They are are bragging how much money the company will make when they raise the prices.

      This is also when the lead discovers the safe that has the money he desperately needs; but to the execs, it is just for everyday expenses… Chump Change.

      1: This way the ‘bad guys’ who the lead?is stealing from will be directly related to the problem: The high price of the medicine. It is poetic?justice

      2: Also, if it is his daughter and not him who needs the medicine?your lead character will be more sympathetic to the audience.

      3: The Irony is, to the lead character the money in the safe means the entire world… to the Pharma exects it means less than nothing, just some cash they use when they don’t want what they’re doing on the books,

      Your lead character is breaking the law, but everyone can relate to a father who, after exhausting?every legal measure, will do anything for the life of his little girl.

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2018-02-27T08:39:42+10:00Added an answer on February 27, 2018 at 8:39 am

      Here are two logline attempts, hope they help
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      “Diagnosed with cancer, a shy Brooklyn delivery boy has one night to acquire thumbs from 5 mafia bosses in order to open a safe with the money to pay for his Chemotherapy.”

      “When his daughter is diagnosed with cancer,? a desperate?FedEx?delivery man has one night to acquire the thumbs of two seedy big pharma execs that will open a safe with the money to pay for his daughter’s?Chemotherapy.”
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      by the way, I give this story ‘two thumbs up’

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