Pseudo
Callum.SPenpusher
In order to regain his memories, a reckless entrepreneur must indulge in a powerful hypnotic to overcome trained assassins that know him best.
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Hey Callum S.
I noticed in your logline you gave your lead two goals. First you say he must regain his memories then you say he must overcome trained assassins.
I would change the wording around a bit for clarification.
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“In order to overcome trained assassins, a reckless entrepreneur must undergo hypnotherapy to regain key lost memories on how to defeat the paid killers.”
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I have to admit I am not sure how regaining lost memories will help him overcome trained assassins. Was your lead once a trained killer in a forgotten part of his life? If so how does he know he forgot those key memories in order to begin his hypnotherapy?
You might want to clarify how regaining lost memories and overcoming assassins correlate to one another.
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“In order to overcome trained assassins, a reckless entrepreneur must undergo hypnotherapy to regain lost memories of life as a trained operative to defeat the paid killers.”
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Hope that helped, Good luck with this!
Its a very very complex concept that i’m struggling to get my head around ! I still haven’t developed it enough and it’s still basic but i became impatient and just wrote a logline. Whatever idea i finally produce is based around the title ‘Pseudo’ when something is false or is counterfeit. There’s an idea somewhere rattling up in my head but i can’t get a grasp on it yet ! I did have some ideas about a very powerful psychedelic drug which replaces society’s currency. A drug which allows people to imagine what they need in life. Society is still separated in classes. Upper class who are constantly ‘Day dreaming’, then deprived people who live in reality. But its still early stages. Thanks for the response ill take it into account !
Its still a very basic concept in writing but complex in my head, if that makes sense ? ahah This isn’t really the best logline to portray my concept its just i grew bored so decided to write a logline. The title is ‘Pseudo’ which means something that is counterfeit or fake. I had some ideas about a psychedelic drug which enhances the minds visual imagination to an extent that somebody can take the drug and live life without the necessity’s of reality, but just imagine them. As i said i’m finding it difficult to simplify the ideas in my head to portray it as a logline, and the fact that i haven’t actually developed the story yet is a key factor. Anyways thanks for the comment !
I’m a little confused in your story, so don’t know where to begin with feedback.
Your protagonist … a reckless entrepreneur?
Your antagonist … a trained (perhaps ruthless, or unstoppable) assassin? (Let’s centre it to one person – or else, make the antagonist the person pulling the strings of the assassins).
Your event … he has lost his memories. How? What is the visual sequence which will tell the audience he has lost his memories? Is it a bullet to the head like the end of XMen Origins Wolverine? (Please don’t let it be a bullet to the head like the end of XMen Origins Wolverine).
Now it gets confusing. Because I want to know what the rest of the film is about, and your description is that your protagonist indulges in a powerful hypnotic. I don’t know what a powerful hypnotic is, I don’t want to watch 90 mins of a character indulging in it … I hope he does something else more proactive, and I don’t understand how indulging in the hypnotic will either help to bring back his lost memories, or defeat a killer. Nor do I understand why there is a killer after him.
Yh so am I ! I really haven’t developed the plot yet