The Bridge That Couldn’t Be Built
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>>>without any logical explanation to it.
That for me is a fundamental problem.? This is where your appeal to “The Terminal” and “The Castaway” falls short to my way of thinking. In those movies, ?we know why the Tom Hanks character is trapped in the airport and on the island. There are logical, causal?explanations.
And if you are (finally) going to give them mysterious circumstances and ?a sign, then it needs to be foreshadowed.??They can’t just drop out the sky out of blue, er, the dark,? 1/2 way through the story chronologically ?otherwise it constitutes a deus ex machina? contrivance.? That premonition could be an unusual message that they see on what normally be a traffic sign as they are driving the into San Francisco for the dinner — a plant, a premonition.?
My point is:? supernatural events can’t just come out of nowhere.? Well, they can.? But in?movies ?they shouldn’t. ?The inviolate rule is that they must be set up, foreshadowed, usually ?in the 1st Act.? (And the real 1st Act of your story in terms of the time line is the dinner even though you are interweaving the time line such that the story starts later on the bridge)
fwiw
Putting aside the matter of whether ” emotionally and mentally transform themselves” constitutes a valid objective goal, how would they? know from the?mysterious circumstances that is what they should be trying to accomplish?
( Moses did not decipher what he was supposed to do by?merely coming upon?a?mysterious?burning bush on a rugged mountain.? The bush had to talk.)
I’m guessing the Golden Gate is a metaphor for the?dramatic problem?of the Thanksgiving dinner, the?wide gap in family relationships (particularly between mother and son) ?that the couple were not able to bridge.? Is that a?correct assumption?
Mysteriously trapped on a deserted Golden Gate bridge after a disastrous Thanksgiving dinner, an interracial couple must …???… in order to get off the bridge alive.
But do what?
(It is generally?not advisable for a logline?to be about HOW? the plot is woven.? Better to focus on?WHAT the plot? is.)
Hello,
I like this version less than the previous versions – there are the same issues and a few more confusing elements ‘thanksgiving dinner with events at the dinner’, ‘to remedy illogical and family crises in respective locations’.