Penpusher
Posted: 2021-10-27T07:34:20+10:00 In:

Leaving a trail of bodies in his wake, a vengeful college student must kill the men who murdered his parents while dealing with a determined government agent who will stop at nothing to catch him.

Leaving a trail of bodies in his wake, a vengeful college student must kill the men who murdered his parents while dealing with a determined government agent who will stop at nothing to catch him.
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    1. Samurai

      For color:
      Are the “men” classmates?
      What was the motive for killing his parents?
      Can the agent be a local sheriff or an FBI agent?

      Hook fuel – local authorities handle murder, so what’s behind the use of “must”? Anything interesting about how he avenges the death of his parents?

      Keep going!

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    2. Singularity

      I get the story from the logline, so that is a plus because sometimes I read a logline and I still have no clue what the story is about. So good job making the story clear.

      I do think you need one more element or twist in the logline to set this apart from other ‘out for vengeance’ movies.
      Something to make the reader of the logline sit up and take notice. Something to make them think, “Ooh, that’s interesting” (A Hook)

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