Martin, a perfect square, discovers his divorce and general sense of unhappiness can be linked back to a lack lustre sex life, to help overcome his sexual inadequacies he hires a prostitute.

“Martin, a perfect square, discovers his divorce and general sense of unhappiness can be linked back to a lack lustre sex life, to help overcome his sexual inadequacies he hires a prostitute.”

If you haven’t already, check the Formula tab at the top of the page. For starters, unless it is a historical figure or a character from a pre-existing franchise, do not include a fictional character’s name, instead describe their personality, ?preferably a character flaw which they have to overcome during the story.
The logline also mostly focuses on the subjective need of the protagonist. But since film is a visual medium, every aspect of the logline she be able to create a clear visual image in the reader’s head. What is his objective goal? How does hiring a prostitute help him achieve that goal, and most importantly, how is this goal represented visually? In other words, at the climax of the film, what will the protagonist succeed or fail in doing?
Another thing, what’s the hook of the story? What will make a producer want to read the script based on this logline? It seems like a pretty standard drama to me, and even more, the whole premise is based around sex, which either means going for an R rating which decreases the audience, or going for PG-13 and not being able to include sex, which is the ‘promise of the premise’.