The Bridge That Couldn’t Be Built
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Hello, I think that when you will have changed ?must reveal a painful truth? and “to survive the horrors that threatens their sanity and life” into something clear and understandable, you’ll have a viable logline.
Lol! Thanks DPG!
No one could set a story with Golden Gate Bridge as the backdrop without consideration of that. The sub-story pays homage to the history of the bridge.
And additional thought for your consideration , if it’s not already in your plot.
If you’re going to place?a?distressed?couple on the Golden Gate bridge you might as well take dramatic advantage of the bridge’s reputation as a “popular” jump off point for suicide.? (Over 1,700 since it was built in 1937, more than 20 a year — and that’s only the confirmed number.)? Whatever problems the couple are having , whatever dark secrets they must face, could be driving them to make the jump — that’s the ultimate jeopardy, the stakes.
fwiw
It would indeed be a mystery for a couple to be stranded on a deserted??Golden Gate bridge, a central artery of transportation in and out of San Francisco.
Unfortunately, “the horrors” is just?too general; it?fails to conjure up an image — and film is a visual medium — as to exactly what the existential threat is.
Also “must reveal a painful truth” seems to relate to a subjective need in their relationship.? But while a subjective need is essential to a well-plotted story, it is extraneous to a logline.? A logline is explicitly?about objective goals that?characters ?want, not their subjective needs. (Subjective needs?factor into loglines?implicitly as character flaws — what?characters must overcome to realize their explicitly defined objective goals.)
So then, when the couple find themselves stranded on a deserted bridge, what becomes their objective goal?? Who or what threatens them — what is the horror?
And what is?at stake?? Their relationship?? Their lives?